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Where sound is taboo the pen will reign
supreme, and you will drown in ink where water rarely falls to earth.

A wordless scream
potent in its own way, but yet as harmful as a paper cut/ Look away wary viewer,
for looking in between these lines is a tricky business/ Thoughts
trapped in this growing cage of gilded words/
Resentment grows behind even figurative bars of metaphors and pretty language.

these words are my release
but some things are better
left alone. even now things are
stirring in their dens of thought
wakened with these trifling ideas of
insentient voices. let sleeping dogs
lie, people are prone to say, as they do,
so goodnight, wary reader, goodnight.

If I’m to live while unawake, I wish these words to heart you take,
And if I’m to die before I wake, to flame I wish these words you take.
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believe it or not, this is a very angry poem. i needed to vent, so i did. it may not seem like it but it's there. anyway, i wrote this on a spare sheet of paper and copied it into word exactly the way it was, with some minor adjustments. the last two lines i added because it needed something more but i must say i rather like them. a lot. yes, i like this whole thing a lot as well. i'm very proud of it.

(c) me completely and totally and if you steal it the doom bunnies will find you and stick your head on a stake like the pig in Lord of the Flies.
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Mood: Love ~Away-From-Me:iconAway-From-Me: May 15, 2008, 1:45:29 PM
Ok.
This is amazing.
Something like this is what I want to end up with every time I write.
It flows wonderfully throughout and I love the rhyme in the last 2 lines. Try as I may, I cannot find a single negative thing.
In all seriousness; you get better every time you write. You poet, you! :ahoy:

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~DarkEcho3:iconDarkEcho3: May 16, 2008, 4:37:22 PM
I agree. So much. Zammy that's great, you should vent more often. <3
~louie9090:iconlouie9090: May 19, 2008, 11:36:32 AM
heh, wow.... there's really not much to say to that except thank you very, very much.

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~louie9090:iconlouie9090: May 19, 2008, 11:36:44 AM
thank ya. =)

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~Away-From-Me:iconAway-From-Me: May 20, 2008, 8:38:44 AM
i take your thanks and raise you a welcome :)

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Ask me about barnacles, you won't regret it. (sometimes, it is what you've got, not just where you stick it.)
~Restfully-Brilliant:iconRestfully-Brilliant: Jun 11, 2008, 6:53:33 PM
I like the ending and I agree with the comments above
it's awesome

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~louie9090:iconlouie9090: Jun 16, 2008, 8:21:24 AM
you honor me beyond thanks my friend.

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